hello,i'm liu yang shuo.this is my first blog.This is my first visit to the Unites States,eyerything here is so beautiful.. I love here very much. I want to improve the level of my English. I come from China. And I come to the U.S,because of my dream.The Unites States is the most powerful country in the world, I want to feel the American education when i am young. I was a lively girl, i like to make friends with different people from different country. I like swimming, i study swimming when i was 5 years old, i think water is important for to live.
Also, I usually go somewhere to buy colorful clothes,i always want to look good in their own. I have been acted in a play when i was 7 yeas old, i was proud of this. I think i will cherish this opportunity to learn the United States.
Yang Shuo, you are a very interesting person! This is a solid paragraph with
ReplyDeletelots of details. You use many good adjectives, and give your opinions. I like that. Here are some suggestions:
1. Start each sentence with a capital letter. Use capitals for proper nouns such as your name and the pronoun 'I'. (Hello, I'm Liu Yang Shuo.)(I like to make friends.)
2. "I have been acted in a play..." (I acted in a play when I was 7 years old.)
You give good reasons for what you are writing. Grade = 92
I like your post =), We have one thing in common, swimming. I love swimming pool and water. Maybe when we have time we can go to swimming!=D
ReplyDeletei love your blog but be attention your grammer:))
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